Editorial Review for Touched by Darkness

With a little work, Touched by Darkness can be vastly better than Twilight. I genuinely believe that and I cannot wait to get my hands on the next installment!

Our team agrees your style is visual and you have a solid knack for character development. There is a lot of good quality to your craft and it shines in parts of this book.

Now that props are out of the way, we can delve into the painful bits. Most of the problems occur in the first half of the book and while parts of this review may sound grim, I assure you, they are easily resolved if you bare with us.

This book was dreadfully slow in the beginning. At times, I desperately wanted to quit reading it. If TopShelf wasn't publishing this book and if I wasn't being told that I had to do it, I most certainly would have quit reading before reaching the halfway mark. However, after trudging through a few poorly written chapters – writing, in my opinion, so inexcusable that it was making my blood pressure rise – I eventually did start enjoying it. I actually enjoyed it a lot!

I am a true fan of the Twilight series. I have read all the books and have seen the movies. I meant what I said when I declared that this book could easily be better than Twilight.

The following are a series of pdfs that mark out the edits made in each chapter, by three different editors, along with notes made by those editors, compiled and abridged by Keith Katsikas. 

 

Editorial Notes | Prologue | Chapter 1 | Chapter 2 | Chapter 3 | Chapter 4 | Chapter 5 | Chapter 6 | Chapter 7 | Chapter 8 | Chapter 9 | Chapter 10 | Chapter 11 | Chapter 12 | Chapter 13 | Chapter 14

Cliches | LY AdverbsPassive Voice | Showing vs. Telling | Unnecessary Words